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I am myself


I am from the earth
From carbon and hydrogen
I am from the air in the cool breeze
(Quite and riveting)
I am from the mountains,
the latin country
Whose hands have always
Been mine

I am from the curls and the smile,
From the city and the country.
I’m from the studied
 And the knowledgable,
From care and interest.
I’m from a people of study
With ambition
And the inspiration to achieve

I’m from the Peruvian coast,
Thick corn and coca tea.
From the people I have
That truly care
To the schools that taught me well.
In my room there is a space,
where my memories lay.
A moving mass
That carries me everyday.
I am from this entity-
Created from everything before-
as I myself am the mass

I used the mentor text, to help myself keep a consistent structure from my poem. I made sure to keep as much of the poem’s rhythm as I can in order for it to be more smooth sounding. The only parts I really changed were the concept and words themselves. I created the theme to slowly describe myself and where I came from as a character and person. I don’t believe I left out any particular detail, mainly losing rhythm at certain parts of the poem. Overall I felt pretty confident with my final poem because it stayed true to the tone and rhythm of the mentor text.

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  1. Ashley NewmanFebruary 3, 2020 at 9:55 PM

    Hi Bernardo

    I really enjoyed your poem! It was very well written and you provided a lot of detail and it was structured really well. I really struggled writing this poem and your's looks like you have had some practice with writing poems! I think it's important to include geographical features when we describe where we're from like you did in the first stanza. It really helped me picture the actual landscape and feel like I was actually there. I got a sense of the people you grew up around and the respect you have for them. I feel that way about the people I surrounded myself with growing up and it shaped who I am today. I really enjoyed reading your work and appreciate you sharing!

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